Comments, criticisms, and concerns welcome...

Daybreak spills above the edge, chasing shadows from my mind
Images of happiness beneath a starry sky
Memories tinged with meaning, suspended now in time
Beyond the realm of feeling is the place where I can hide

Chorus:
What am I doing here?
Seems I lost my way
Feelings can never die
With so much left to say
I'm looking to the light
Will I be redeemed?
My beautiful illusion...
A life that can never be

The roles we play are not our own and dreams are fading fast
Destiny, obscured by dues, the man now stands detached
Promise that you'll think of me along your chosen path
A broken angel flew too high, my heart still in its grasp

[Bridge]
Mere pawns moved by a greater hand
A plan I cannot see
Free, but chained - time heals all wounds
What I need is all around me

What am I doing here?
Seems I lost my way
Feelings can never die
With so much left to say
I'm looking to the light
Will I be redeemed?
My beautiful illusion...
A life that can never be

I'm looking to the light
Things weren't what they seemed
My beautiful illusion...

A different life awaits me

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Okay, so I wrote this song a few months ago. I think I might use it on the upcoming MT Skills CD (we have to record our own songs). Basically, I'm just wondering what other people's thoughts are. Is it good enough? Should I write something else? Etc. etc. etc. Anything is welcome. :)

I'm thinking possibly a moving guitar part over piano chords/melody...?